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Changing names to better fit a story world

When Isaac and I first created the Distant Horizon universe, we made it as a homebrew role-play game, sort of a cross between the 90s cartoon X-Men, and The Giver. (Dystopian world with superheroes). There were a lot more superhero references in the game…

And in the names.

Especially for the villains.

For example, Lord Black (the founder of the Community), was usually called “Jellyman” or “Lord Gelatinous” due to his natural form looking something like jelly.

*Cough.*

We eventually decided he probably wouldn’t call himself that, and he definitely wouldn’t have encouraged the people in the Community to call him that (especially since they’re very particular about maintaining appearances and hiding the existence of super powers). But the rebels, particularly those who had a grudge against him, might.

I found a stray reference in an early draft of Starless Night where a character grumbles “Son of Gelatinous!” in frustration. Lord Black’s son was something of a rebel, and therefore a source of frustration to his father. Needless to say, that line got reworked, since it no longer made sense.

Another example was Lady Winters, who was first referenced as Brainmaster. She had a couple name changes, actually. First was Brainmaster, then we changed that to Lady Bridget. But that was too easily confused with Lady Black when reading, so we changed it yet again to Lady Winters.

Long story short, we decided there was no way she would call herself Brainmaster, and most of her underlings would know better than to call her that, too. And they try not to think it either, in case she’s reading their mind. That said, due to her cruelty, the Brainmaster moniker has stuck around for both the Camaraderie and rebel faction if she’s not within earshot or mind-reading range.

And then there’s “The Camaraderie of Evil.”

That name actually got to stay. In Whispers in the Code, Commander Rick explains why they kept the name.

“You will be challenged by much of what we do,” he continues. “In the Community, your tasks were simple: program basic systems, keep everything running smoothly… This job is not so simple. We call ourselves the Camaraderie of Evil because we are willing to take steps others wouldn’t dare consider. That’s the only way we can accomplish security and efficiency. I don’t personally believe we are evil, but the name stuck around from our earlier days, and they were… an interesting bunch.”

What the commander doesn’t mention is that they got the name because the founders were a group of young, ambitious (and variably “evil”) people with powers getting frustrated with their uptight “mad scientist” of the group and deciding they would call themselves that to taunt him.

They didn’t expect it to stick and, nowadays, the COE typically just calls themselves the Camaraderie… or if they’re in the Community, “The Community of E-Leadership.”

Other names were changed for ease of reading. Janice became Gwen because we had so many “J” names already and that was the easiest one to swap and keep the others.

Overall, I think the changes were for the better, though they did change the flavor a bit from role-play game to reading.

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Most of the names got updated. Even so, characters leaving the Community for the outside world still have a few superhero/supervillain surprises in store…

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Happy reading and writing!

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Oh, the joys of proofreading

It seems like dishes… and just about anything else… gets done when it’s time for the proofreading stage.

Oh, there’s a chore that needs done? Dishes been piling up? The counters are clean now!

Laundry need washed? Everything’s now been washed and hung in the closet! (Or neatly stacked in a chair because the closet is cold and I’d rather put on warm clothes in the morning thank-you-very-much).

Plants need a little bit of pruning? Even those pesky scale bugs are about to face the gardener’s otherwise defeated wrath.

Or, for a little more fun… new stories need written? Old stories need revised? Let’s do this!

(Inner voice just scowls. “No new stories for you right now. Jot down a few notes and get back to proofreading! Finish what you’ve started!”)

*Sigh.*

There’s all these other new stories calling you to write them, but you’re stuck giving that manuscript you’ve looked over nearly a dozen times one more read to look for typos, and then after you’ve given it that maybe-final/maybe-not-final read you’ve got to actually input those notes into the manuscript.

*Cue second sigh.*

Proofreading might be my least favorite part of the process.

Still, proofreading is important, and helps me to correct little typos I don’t want you guys to suffer through. Missing “a”s and “the”s. The occasional word that just doesn’t make sense. Minor plot points I thought I removed during the read-aloud but accidentally remained in place. That sort of thing.

It’s all about polishing… even if, for me, it is the least interesting part of the process.

Funny thing is that in the 2018 newsletter email I’m adapting this post from, I was lamenting the proofreading process for Fractured Skies.

Now I’m lamenting the proofreading/editing process for The Dark Forest of Aneth. The reading part’s been done. I just need to add my editing notes to the manuscript. But… uh… there’s been an outline and draft written for Huntress 3 and a whole new 5,000-word short story drafted, polished, and sent to beta-readers since I finished that reading a few months ago. *Cough.*

So… yeah.

Do I need to write that draft I’ve been meaning to write for five years?

Looks like I just need to get myself some proofreading or editing notes!

In the meantime… here’s a throwback to when my Legion Spore plushie got to help out with the proofreading:

A plushie Legion Spore sits atop a printed manuscript with a red pen

Isn’t it adorable? (Well, as adorable as living airships made from shapeshifters go). Isaac made it for me for Christmas a few years back.

Actually, I also made him a Legion Spore plushie (we both had the same idea), but let’s just say that the one he made better matched the first Legion Spore, and the one I made closer resembled the Manticore. We had a productive discussion after that regarding the differences between how we saw the living airship of The Glitch Saga.

Needless to say, the Legion Spores you see in the books have been refined a bit.

Or a lot.

And that’s another reason that proofreading… and read-alouds… and beta-reading… is important!

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Read a few polished books that I at some point had to proofread or edit…

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Happy reading and writing!

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📋50,000 Words and a Change of Plans

🖋️A few months ago, I decided for NaNoWriMo that I’d like to write Huntress #3. I’d written the first two during earlier NaNos, and I tried last year but didn’t have a solid outline, so my attempts to rewrite it floundered.

This year, I thought, once I finished Legends of Cirena #9, I’d reread the first two books, make myself an outline, and then be ready to go come November.

Fast forward to the end of October… when I was still trying to wrap up the rough draft for LoC #9 (to be fair, at this point it is a mostly revised draft with a handful of first draft scenes because the process for this one has been messier than usual, though I’m considerably happier with where it is now)… I realized I was not going to be able to start Huntress #3 and still start on the first of November.

And there were a couple factors I’ve learned about myself:

  1. I enjoy the momentum/self-competitiveness of starting at a set day (especially with other people) and trying to reach a goal by a set time.
  2. I really need that outline if I want a streamlined process that doesn’t involve me staring blankly at the screen. I am very much a plotter/plantser. I like some leeway to run with a tangent, but I need to be able to fully envision the scene if I’m going to avoid getting derailed and also write quickly.

With that in mind, Isaac suggested that maybe I should try working on another project that was ready to go.

The one project I could think of that didn’t have anything else attached to it yet was Isaac’s Untitled Fantasy Story project that we heavily outlined a year or so ago but hadn’t written.

So I grabbed that Scrivener file come midnight on October 31st, reviewed a couple of the scene notes, and went from there.

It’s been a little rough going, but so far I’ve managed to stay on par (above 1667 words per day) and reached the 50K word goal as of last night.

Biggest problem is trying to remember exactly how the magic system works and the context for some of the scenes. The ones with the biggest questions I skipped and plan to go back to later. But it’s been fun rediscovering the big twists and key plot points as I write, since I’ve really only been reading a few scenes of the outline at a time. (By outline I mean something like a synopsis… it’s got detail).

And this has really led me to realize that I write faster and better when I have the scene envisioned in my head, either because I’ve already told myself that story (The Wishing Blade series), or because someone has told that story to me (such as in this case, in which the story is Isaac’s creation, but I’m doing the writing. Or like in some of our role-play games turned novels, like Distant Horizon.)

Anyway, though this story had been a back-burner project a month ago, I’m now debating how much attention I want to give this.

  • Finish the rough draft? – definitely
  • Make revisions accounting for things I remembered while writing later scenes? – probably
  • Do a polishing revision pass? – not sure yet
  • Write rough draft for book two? – well… I should probably go finish LoC #9 and Huntress #3 first. probably

But I really am enjoying it, and kind of excited to move forward on the project. So we’ll see. ☺️

Here’s the short pitch:

In a world where non-mages are systematically killed or enslaved, a notorious elderly mage known for protecting non-mages drops an over-zealous “chosen one” youngster into the training of an academic mage whose polyamorous family secretly harbors a non-mage.

Mages have wands and staves, there’s an evil empire, some secrets about what happens when magic gets over-used, and animal familiars. Lots of fun! 😁

What writing processes have you found work best for you?

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Happy writing and reading!

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